Gay Gilleland
Thursday, August 11, 2011
Comment on my poem.....?
Really good, but you use "and" too much I think. Also, the word tangelo, at least to me, took away from the intensity that I felt. Try using orange instead. It isn't as fancy, but it's less distracting. Very good job though.
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